原句：Although I have never been to the races before, I was very excited to behold them, yet also somewhat nervous, because of the type of people who go there.
修改后：I’d never been to a horse race. I was excited to go, but also a little nervous, since I wasn’t sure about the people at the track.
原句：As I went in the door,I turned and saw a TV.I looked around and saw posters on the all.As I went further in I noticed everyone was watching M*A*S*H.
修改后：I immediately noticed the posters on the wall, though every else’s eyes were focused on a TV playing M*A*S*H.
原句：When I first saw the comic book fans jumping up and down, I thought as they would, “Lord, what fools these mortals be” (Gaiman 1989.) I later learned why they do this.
修改后：The fans jump up and down. When I first saw this, I wondered what they were doing and my mind conjured a quote from Shakespeare that Neil Gaiman used in his“Sandman”: “Lord, what fools these mortals be.”However, I watched a bit longer and realized the company spokesmodels were throwing free merchandise. The fans wanted to get the most from their day at the convention.
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